In planning the source-based essay, students will choose a topic from the professors list or have their topic approved by the professor prior to their beginning the essay. A source-based essay synthesizes information from multiple sources. It may use one or more of the following rhetorical strategy: argumentation/persuasion. If required by yourprofessor, students will a) participate in an professor-approved preparatory assignment such as Think/Pair/Share, group work, focused freewriting, probative questions, and/or webbing to determine what they know about their chosen topic, what they need to discover about their chosen topic, and where they might find this information; b) if required by their professor, gather supporting information and bring to the next session for classroom use; c) develop a working thesis; and d) construct a well-supported word-processed essay that conforms to the specific writing mode for their assignment. Learning Outcomes: The students will choose an approved subject and write a source-based essay of three or more pages plus a Works Cited page. This essay will contain: a focused thesis suitable to the essays subject and purpose language and tone appropriate for the targeted audiencean organizational structure appropriate to the essays subject and purposeconcrete substance such as specific and sensory details, figurative language (simile, metaphor, personification), and dialoguea coherent arrangement of ideas (effective introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion) and appropriate transitional devicesinformation borrowed from one or more secondary sourcesin-text documentation (following MLA guidelines) and the research specifics required by the professorbasic computer literacyAssessment: Each student will demonstrate competency by producing a coherent word-processed source-based essay of three or more pages. The essay will be evaluated on content, organization, style (including compliance with MLA guidelines), and mechanics.
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Why This Essay Gets an A
Topic/Thesis/Content: 19 points
This essay gets 19 points for topic/thesis/content because it includes an excellent thesis that
acknowledges potential conflicting points of view while strongly stating the author’s own
position. The thesis is then supported by well detailed paragraphs that define the terms and
explain the quotes the author is using, making their position and reasoning clear.
Organization: 19 points
This essay gets 19 points because it is logically organized and easy to follow, moving from an
explanation of the difference between punishment and abuse to discussing how punishment can
help a child form better decision making, personal discipline, and finally, better ethics and
morals. Some transitions could be improved, but overall, the essay flows very well.
Quality of References: 18 points
This essay gets 18 points for quality of references because they are all excellent, peer-reviewed
sources drawn from the databases.
Use of Sources/MLA Documentation: 18 points
This essay gets 18 points for use of sources and MLA documentation because it uses all of its
sources well, correctly documents them (even in the instance where it appears to combine them),
and most importantly, provides detailed explanations of what the reader should understand from
the quotes provided.
Grammar/Mechanics: 20 points
This essay gets 20 points for grammar and mechanics because it is well edited and has no
noticeable errors that in any way detract from the author’s point.
Total Score: 94
This essay is a solid A for a number of reasons. It is well thought out, organized, and explained.
Its argument is supported by excellent sources, and these sources are explained to the reader. Its
only real fault is that it could more clearly define what “Taibatsu” is, but that is but one of its
details, and the reader still gets a sense of what the author is discussing. Most importantly, the
author acknowledges that this argument does not exist in a vacuum. The introduction
acknowledges opposing points of view. The conclusion draws connections to broader arguments
in society. Overall, this is an A essay because it conscientiously engages in a dialog about its
Example A Essay
Professor North Lake
19 April 2017
The Power of Punishment
Growth is one of the most important parts of being human. Whether one does something
against what they know is right or not, it is vital that that individual grows and learns from their
actions. This is what will lead one to thrive in the real world. For children, there are certain
facets of growing up that encourage this type education and self-progress to occur. Corporal
punishment plays a necessary role in promoting this ability to grow and thrive. Although
punishing children too harshly can be destructive, I argue that punishment is necessary in a
childs growth because it leads to better decision making, encourages more discipline, and
promotes better morals.
Although it is evident that punishment can escalate and lead to outcomes such as physical
Commented [ER1]: This is a very strong thesis. It
acknowledges the opposing point of view while strongly
stating the author’s.
or verbal abuse, the pros strongly outweigh the cons. The idea that corporal punishment can lead
to abusive parental behavior is a huge topic of controversy among individuals. In the experiment
“The Role of Race in the Association between Corporal Punishment and Externalizing Problems:
Does Punishment Severity Matter?.” conducted by Geneviewe E. Lapre and Monica A. Marsee,
it is stated that Although this popular punishment style is often associated with short-term
obedience (Gershoff 2002), children who experience corporal punishment may display long term
psychosocial adjustment problems (Lapre and Marsee 1). Basically, this is promoting the idea
that punishing children may cause them to follow the rules or not make the same mistake again
for a while, but it could affect them detrimentally later on. Too strict of punishment could lead to
Commented [ER2]: The author combines two citations here
which leads to some confusion over which source is saying
possible mental problems for children and emotional distress. But, this only occurs if corporal
punishment is too severe. Of course, if a parent is abusing their child either verbally or physically
and leaving marks or scars, the child is going to feel emotionally and physically unstable. It
would lead most anyone to feel this same way considering the severity of the punishment. But,
Commented [ER3]: Here the author draws a clear line
between what they consider appropriate punishment and
what they consider abuse. This helps the reader understand
what exactly they mean by those terms.
corporal punishment doesnt mean abuse; or at least it shouldnt. It can be mild punishment that
purely pushes an individual in the right path without putting any psychological or physical harm
on themselves. It can have various benefits, including its ability to lead to better decision making
Most every individual strives to make better decisions in their life. Corporal punishment
can be a major contributor for a child to learn from their mistake and make a better decision in
Commented [ER4]: While it is becoming more and more
acceptable to use “they” as a genderless singular pronoun,
most instructors will still want you to use “his or her” in a
situation like this.
the future. In Patrick Lentas essay “Corporal Punishment of Children.” he states that
individuals justify a punishment by identifying the goods that it can bringdeterrence of
wrongdoing (Letna 2). The purpose of this statement is to highlight the idea that a child that
receives physical punishment from a parent will most likely not make their wrong decision
again. This is because, of course, punishment is associated with bad not good. If the parent is
constantly showing warmth and affection, the child may never change their ways towards better
decision making. The use of this type of punishment will ensure that children have learned what
they did wrong, and thus will be less likely to make the mistake again. In reality, knowing that
the decision they made resulted in self penalization, the child should make future decisions that
will benefit themselves and others. This is just one modest example of how corporal punishment
can have beneficial long-term effects. Another apparent one is its ability to send children down
the right path when it comes to self-discipline and direction.
Not only can corporal punishment lead to better decision making, it can also help ensure
Commented [ER5]: Here the author does an excellent job of
explaining the quote to their readers.
discipline in a child. Disciplining a child is a very important measure taken to ensure that they
know where they stand as far as rules go. In the article “Corporal Punishment in Japan.” written
by Aaron Miller, Miller discusses how Taibatsu is a form of corporal punishment used in Japan.
It is stated that Taibatsu has been used in japan for centuries, mostly by adult men to socialize
growing boys into proper ways of Japanese adult life (Miller 40). This way of punishment
turns immature young boys into proper young men. It has also been used for a very long time
(centuries to be exact) leading one to believe that it must be effective considering it is still in use.
Taibatsu is a form of physical punishment, but that doesn’t mean it is abusive or wrong in any
sense. Not punishing a child can lead this child to believe that there is nothing they need to fix
Commented [ER6]: The author should be more specific
about what kind of physical punishment is involved in
because they arent doing anything unsound. When in reality, there is something that needs to be
done. With corporal punishment, it is straightforward and clear to the child that they have made a
mistake. Thus, not wanting to go through the punishment again, they will most likely make a
better decision in the future. The same goes for Taibatsu. It is a very abrupt form of punishment
that effectively molds these boys and teaches them proper ways. Without this corporal
punishment, it is quite unlikely that individuals would have any reason to stray from rule
breaking in light of being disciplined. This will most likely lead to children continuing to break
the rules that are set in place to help them. Not only can corporal punishment enhance discipline,
it can also lead to a better code of ethics.
Morals are a very important facet of ones life. They are what allow individuals to make
the decisions they know in their heart are right. Last but certainly not least, punishment has the
ability to promote better morals for a child. In Hazel Blums article Reforming (But Not
Eliminating) the Parental Discipline Defense she states that corporal punishment is a desirable
and necessary instrument of restraint upon sin and immorality (Blum 9). It is evident that Blum
Commented [ER7]: This transition could be stronger if the
author stuck with either ethics or morals. While the two are
closely related, they are not the same.
is reiterating the idea that this form of punishment is a vital part of keeping children away from
the danger or threat of developing a bad code of ethics. Children will base much of what they
believe is right or wrong from what they are taught as children and what they learn from their
parents. If parents dont provide strict enough punishment or are far too easy on their children,
then these said kids wont develop a moral code of what is right or wrong. If they get a certain
Commented [ER8]: This can be cut
punishment from their parents, this will provide a straightforward method of letting children
know that a certain action they performed was frowned upon. Every time the possibility comes
up for the child to make the decision again in their young and adult life, they will be cognizant of
Commented [ER9]: This is excellent use of this less
the memory of getting punished from performing said activity or pursuing whatever it was that
allowed them to get punished. Thus, they will probably associate the action that got them in
trouble with being morally wrong. Hopefully this will lead them to develop morals that they
know are tried and true because of the punishment they received as children. With the good
morals set in mind, children will most likely be able to use their mistake to build a better future
life for themselves. As it can clearly be seen, corporal punishment has a plethora of noticeable
Even though abuse is real and can occur, it is obvious that corporal punishment has many
beneficial outcomes including its ability to help a child make better decisions, provide them with
more discipline, and encourage a better code of ethics. Parents today tend to be much less strict
Commented [ER10]: Note how the author reviews their
main points at the beginning of this conclusion.
on their children because of issues such as physical abuse that seem to be headlining all around.
Because of this, children are beginning to lose sight of what they know is right and lose their
sense of morality. The ubiquitous corporal punishment that used to be present in most household
is what kept children in line and taught them the rights and wrongs of life. Without this, children
could develop a decreased work ethic, have less drive, and have less discipline in future social
Commented [ER11]: Note how the author expands here
from their specific argument about punishment to a broader
argument about the decline of society. Connective your
argument to a larger argument is a great way to conclude
and formal situations. If people dont know how to act and dont know what to and what not to
do, the world will simply not spin as it should. The question is, will individuals see the benefits
of corporal punishment and use it to keep this travesty from occurring?
Blum, Hazel. “Reforming (But Not Eliminating) the Parental Discipline Defense.” University of
Michigan Journal of Law Reform, vol. 49, no. 4, Summer2016, pp. 921-948.
Lapré, Genevieve and Monica Marsee. “The Role of Race in the Association between Corporal
Punishment and Externalizing Problems: Does Punishment Severity Matter?.” Journal of
Child & Family Studies, vol. 25, no. 2, Feb. 2016, pp. 432-441. EBSCOhost,
Lenta, Patrick. “Corporal Punishment of Children.” Social Theory & Practice, vol. 38, no. 4,
Oct. 2012, pp. 689-716. EBSCOhost,
Miller, Aaron L. “Corporal Punishment in Japan.” Anthropology in Action, vol. 23, no. 1,
Spring2016, pp. 39-45. EBSCOhost, doi:10.3167/aia.2016.230106.
Commented [DI12]: Works Cited page follows accurate
DIRW 0310: Annotated Bibliography (10%)
Annotated Bibliography Instructions:
Your Annotated Bibliography assignment should consist of two academic articles that you plan
to use in your argument/research essay. The AB should feature the following information:
1.? A creative, original title that coordinates with the title of your argument/research essay
2.? Your thesis statement
3.? An accurate MLA citation for the research article(s) you found
4.? An annotation (paragraph) that includes the following information (think APP+R):
A. Whats the article about?
Give its title, the authors name, and the articles main idea.
B. Whats the point of the article?
Give a brief 2-3 sentence summary of the entire article. In this section, think and
discuss the kind of evidence the author uses to support his or her idea.
C. Whats the proof?
Give at least one quote from the article (with intext citation) that is relevant to
your essays argument/sub-arguments.
And explain how that quote will function in your essay in one sentence.
D. ?Reflect on the article and its credibility.
Options (choose two to assess the articles credibility):
– Does the author have degree(s) in the articles subject matter?
– Is the author associated with a reputable university or college?
– Is the article fairly new or was it published many years ago?
– How long is the article?
– How many sources does the article cite? A few or very many?
Professor North Lake
English 1301- 73100
31 December 1999
The Simplicity of Punishment:
An Annotated Bibliography
Thesis statement: Although giving children no punishment at all may be a simple option for the
parent, guardian, or teacher, I argue that if you punish a child through verbal, corporal, and
withdrawing privileges they will be more responsible and mature.
Dhaem, Jeanne. “Responding to Minor Misbehavior through Verbal and Nonverbal Responses.”
Beyond Behavior?, vol. 21, no. 3, Spring2012, pp. 29-34. EBSCO?host?,
The article ?Responding to Minor Misbehavior Through Verbal and Nonverbal Responses was
written by Jeanne Dhae. The articles main purpose is to inform and show data on the effects of
two levels of intervention that will help address students behavior. The article goes into detail
about the method, participants, and procedures used in the tests. It provides example of what is
considered level one interventions and level two interventions. Then, it lists results after the
hypothesis are tested for six weeks. I will use the quote “I am working out the problem with you.
We are a team and you are responsible for your own behavior as an example of verbalized
communication with a child (4). This supports the sub-argument that verbal punishment can lead
to a child being more responsible and mature. The article is about 5 pages in length, and the
author is a current assistant professor of special education at the William Patterson University
which leads me to believe this is a credible source and could be used effectively in my essay.
Gregory K, Fritz. “Discipline: A Guide for Parents.” ?Brown University Child & Adolescent
Behavior Letter?, vol.30, Nov2014 Supplement, pp. 1-2. EBSCO?host?,
The article ?Discipline: A Guide for Parents was written by Gregory K. Fritz, M.D. The
articles main purpose is to give guidance to parents on how to discipline their children. The
article explains how delaying childrens privilege can be an effective way for a parent to
discipline their child. The article gives examples on physical punishment, taking away privileges,
and even positive reinforcement. The article gives a great example of delaying a privilege as a
form of punishment: if a child breaks the rule about where he or she can go on his or her bike,
take away the bike for a few days (2). I will use this article for this essay to explain how
guidelines can help a parent discipline their children in a better way. The article was published
out of Brown University (an IV league school), and the author has an M.D. and is a doctor, so
the article seems to be credible enough to use as a support piece of research for my essay.
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Argumentative Paper Format
*Please note that this is only a sample format. There are multiple ways to organize an
1-2 paragraphs tops
PURPOSE: To set up and state ones claim
? Make your introductory paragraph interesting. How can you draw
your readers in?
? What background information, if any, do we need to know in order
to understand your claim? If you dont follow this paragraph with a
background information paragraph, please insert that info here.
? If youre arguing about a literary workstate author + title
? If youre arguing about an issue or theory provide brief explanation
or your of issue/theory.
? If youre arguing about a filmstate director, year + title
? STATE your claim at the end of your introductory paragraph
1-2 paragraphs tops; Optional (can omit for some papers). Also, sometimes
this info is incorporated into the introduction paragraph (see above).
PURPOSE: Lays the foundation for proving your argument.
Will often include:
? Summary of works being discussed
? Definition of key terms
? Explanation of key theories
SUPPORTING EVIDENCE PARAGRAPH #1
PURPOSE: To prove your argument. Usually is one paragraph but it can be
Topic Sentence: What is one item, fact, detail, or example you can tell your
readers that will help them better understand your claim/paper topic? Your
answer should be the topic sentence for this paragraph.
Explain Topic Sentence: Do you need to explain your topic sentence? If so,
do so here.
Introduce Evidence: Introduce your evidence either in a few words (As Dr.
Brown states ? ?) or in a full sentence (?To understand this issue we first
need to look at statistics).
State Evidence: What supporting evidence (reasons, examples, facts,
statistics, and/or quotations) can you include to prove/support/explain your
Explain Evidence: How should we read or interpret the evidence you are
providing us? How does this evidence prove the point you are trying to make
in this paragraph? Can be opinion based and is often at least 1-3 sentences.
Concluding Sentence: End your paragraph with a concluding sentence that
reasserts how the topic sentence of this paragraph helps up better
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